Contiguous Collection of Consistent Contradictions

The light shines from the radiant page
Awake!
The battle-cry of the textbook, crumpled pages
Marked and marked and marked for more lucid moments.

Tales told and echoed through time
Demand!
Consideration of the eyes and thoughts and sentiments unseen
Who wept and cheered and laughed and bore horror’s torment.

Prose that winds the page like a coiled snake
Dangerous!
Fires set in hearts a century apart, joined in feeling
Yet split by a clock do minds twirl and race and excite by others long since dead

And thunder dwells ‘neath breast and nipple
Uncaged!
Never tamed, but for this fire inside, passed not by seed but word and deed
Alight! This sweet flame, this fickle bitch, this angry, loving, rich and poor
Beautiful monster inside
Destroyer of the world
Creator of the new
Tyrant and Liberator
Embittered and
Softened
Sculpted

Self.

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  • “Bad poetry” might be a fun shtick for you to play with on your site, but I’m afraid if you keep writing poems as good as this one you’ll have to find a new title. I’ve been looking through a lot of blogs lately and this one blows a good lot of the poems I’ve been reading right out of the water.

    I think the first stanzas, where you had a form (a pretty awesome form, and I quite liked the varying line length) and stuck to it. I admit I’m a lot less fond of the ending, with all that buildup to… “self”? I confess, from my point of view, I don’t quite get it, and I doubt I would agree with it if I did.

    Nevertheless, I really enjoyed this. It’s tough to talk about the world of words and books and learning and make it sound interesting and uncliched, but that’s what you pulled off. Favorite lines:

    “Marked and marked and marked for more lucid moments” (though I can’t help but think it would be stronger without the third “marked”?)

    the entire third paragraph

    “Alight! This sweet flame, this fickle bitch, this angry, loving, rich and poor
    Beautiful monster inside…”

    Thank you for the read.

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    • Jobey, thank you for your very kind words. I appreciate your feedback for the clear discussion of what works and doesn’t work–helpful tools to be given!

      Now as to the ending, the buildup simply to “Self,” my thinking is simply this: that it’s all these kinds of experiences, the beautiful and the ugly, the literary and the tattered moments of exhausted half-consciousness, that together form, in countless possible variations, the very stuff of who I am–who anyone is. We are, in the end, a whole lotta noodles all in one bowl 🙂

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